Tuesday, May 5, 2009

The New Generation

The New Generation

The same screaming whistling sound blasted through his head. He jolted up wards he smashed is forehead on the dark ceiling. Rubbing his forehead in pain, he inched his way down the ladder and out of his room. As he ran his hand down the tattered wall he stumbled. he caught balance he looked up the living room wall and roof were completely gone and he now had remembered were he was. The waste land nothing, but dead trees and decaying houses. He slumped to the ground and started to cry. Five years ago the world went into its 4th and final world war nuking all that there was. As he got up, he wiped the tears and wandered to the shed in the back yard. He pulled out his shining silver Mountain bike he started out of his yard. As he pedaled past old stores and houses he looked at the dark dense sky. He arrived at WA MA T or at least that’s what he called it. As he covered his bike in a large piece of tarp he looked up and yelled “olly olly oxen free!” A long thin rope ladder fell from the top. A small face peered over and then yelled “Boy is hear!” Boy started to climb the rope. As he got to the top he saw two kids standing the by the small hatch leading inside both holding an AK47 and smoking a cigar. Boy walked up and they asked him to remove any weapons he may have, so he handed them a large hunting knife with the initials B.O.Y. engraved on it. As he crawled through the small opening in the roof he came upon the main part of the barren super store. As he crossed through the vast labyrinth of isles he got to the storage. Knock 3 times then say ted was a bear he whispered to himself fearing he would screw up and they would shoot him. He knocked 3 times then said ted was a bear the door slowly slid back and another kid was standing there with an AK he said your late in a deep voice that boy hadn’t heard for a long time. As he was walking through the small maintenance hallway he came to the basement door. The tall thin child opened it and then turned and walked away. Boy walked down the slimy wet stairs to a large open room with about seven other children and Mayor Funk. Mayor Funk stood up and said “Hear yee, hear yee. This meeting of the F@CK (the word spray painted on the wall when they found WA MA T) shall now come to order! We are facing a major problem and I have gathered all of you to help. As you know the number of people we have hiding here are making it cramped. So to cope with the problem we need you guys to find a new place and seeing Sven and Boy are not from WAMAT they can give us some help.” “Well there is the ST. Marians hospital” Sven blurted out. “And it’s next to the mall” another kid shouted. They all cheered and stared to chant yes, yes, yes! Boy quickly snapped back “no!” every on looked angrily back at boy and he quickly sloped down. “Well for one thing it’s across town and for another thing there is also the fact that we don’t know how safe it is.” Boy hated hospitals they creeped him out and the smelled like dead people. But this was not if he liked it or not. As Mayor Funk then pointed out, there would be more room for people and that meant the 40 other people stalking in the shadows could come out and help start a new world a new generation.

2 comments:

  1. Hi Ben! Mrs. Marren-Reitsma here....
    Fantastic first line in your work--it captures my attention immediately and sets the tone of urgency and action. I loved your great vocabulary choices too: "smashed", "inched", "tattered", "stumbled", "jolted" and "slumped" are all great words written already in the first few lines!
    You have also used excellent words to show both the destruction and hopelessness of your setting (after the nuclear destruction): the pain of your main character; the slumping; the fearful "inching"; the reference to "waste land"; the adjectives of "dead" and "decaying" to describe the houses; and the adjectives of "dark" and "dense" to describe the sky.
    Other great words: "blurted" and "labyrinth"!
    I really liked the setting and idea behind your story; this is called "anti-utopic" literature, meaning that you set your story in a BAD world, a world that has experienced destruction and savagery and now has to rebuild itself. There are many novels in high school that have this setting, like "Fahrenheit 451" (a Grade 10 novel) and "1984" (a Grade 12 novel). Many blockbuster movies have been anti-utopic stories, like the "Terminator" series...and the movie "Reign of Fire".
    Great job.

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