One day there was a young boy named Jack. Jack was ten years old and his best friend was his pet monkey. That afternoon when Jack came home for school he gave his mother the newsletter that they received at the end of the day, his mother read it, “Bring your pet to school. Show everyone in your class the talents and unique activities he or she provides,”
In previous years Jack has taught his monkey how to make smoothies, juggle, and walk a tight rope. Jack often
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sorry not completely finished.... i'm working on other projects at the moment and had to post what i have done.
ReplyDeleteWhat you have so far is really really good! The only thing I think you need is some great words for example: ineffable (meaning you cant explain something).
ReplyDeleteGood Story
ReplyDeleteIt had monkeys in it
Also stu used too big of word
well you didnt finish the story or it was a really weak ending i like the begining and the plot i wish i had a pet monkey actually no i dont because there would be feicies every where and there would be so much anarchy and tomfoolery going on it would be ridiculace
ReplyDeleteMonkeys are pretty cool
ReplyDeleteyou might want to try expanding your sentece varitey and vocabulary
i like the humor of your story but i didnt care for the ending it was small but i cant complain about that
ReplyDeletehi there its damon here. I absoulutely adored your story. I absolutely love monkeys, but the last part of your story had way too many commas there should be only one or two in a sentence. but other than that good job.
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ReplyDeletejack often ..... ? jack oftern what?: chased cars, ate marshmallows deid what???
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