The Journey to Find the Samsquatch
Once upon A time Denzel Washington And Ben went to find the Samsquatch atop the Diego Mountains. This is how the story begins... “DUDE. LETS GO TO FIND THE SAMSQUATCH.” So off they went to the teleporter the take them to his lair. On their way to the teleporter Denzel and Ben met up with Casper. “Hey Casper wanna go find the Samsquatch?” “Sure!” He said… And they went through the teleporter and were whisked away to his Lair…
Once upon A time Denzel Washington And Ben went to find the Samsquatch atop the Diego Mountains. This is how the story begins... “DUDE. LETS GO TO FIND THE SAMSQUATCH.” So off they went to the teleporter the take them to his lair. On their way to the teleporter Denzel and Ben met up with Casper. “Hey Casper wanna go find the Samsquatch?” “Sure!” He said… And they went through the teleporter and were whisked away to his Lair…
Hi Tyson! This is Stu Clinton, from PGSS.
ReplyDeleteYou have great imagination! I loved the "teleporter" part--very creative. I also liked the idea of the "lair"--lair sounds evil and frightening. `What a great verb "whisked" is. The only thing that bothered me was the random capitals, with the "A" and the "And" but other than that it was good. You also had a very good plot line but you could have made it a little longer by saying what happend when they got into the lair.
Hello! You have a couple of fantastic words: "whisked" and "lair". I also liked your original characters of the specific (and famous) "Denzel Washington" and a random, general character of "Ben". You introduced a new character, Casper...who is Casper? Did Ben and Denzel W. know him previously? I agree with Stu's comment about the evil connotation of "lair" as well--very villainous and suspenseful!
ReplyDeleteIt's not quite done yet. Hahaa i'm behind in some other work so I let this story collect electronic dust.
ReplyDeleteOh wow, Tyson--love the phrase, 'electronic dust'. What a great metaphor. You're smart and witty.
ReplyDeleteI like the story of the samsquatcxh it is very interesting and exhilerating
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